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some people think the best way to solve traffic congestions in cities is to provide free public transport 24 hours a day, 7 days a week.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, in the light of technology technological advancements, there is an increasing number of automobiles on the road. Thus traffic congestions are a chronic issue for many cities. Some assert that free public transport offered at 24/7 is the solution. However, in my view, some supplement[p1]  supplemental measures also need to be implemented without stressing using the city’s revenue.

First of all, in today’s world, auto vehicles have become incredibly affordable hence making it the most ideal transportation. Everybody enjoys the convenience it brings. Evidently, a great number of people commute to work by car and motorcycles. Likewise, teenagers whom qualifies who qualify for a driver driver’s license are also given the privilege of accessibility. This is best illustrated by the example of the fullness seen in the tertiary education institute’s university or college carparks or even the street car parks around the facility. Admittedly, more free public transportations transportation free of charge will significantly motivate people to take this advantage of this.

Additionally, municipal authorities are also recommended to make concerted effort efforts on this matter. For instance, making advertisements on ecology the importance of the environment is essential. This will in turn raise peoples people’s awareness of the environmental conserving conservation, hopefully leading to less use of the automobiles. Another methodology would be that, increasing to increase the parking fare fares and impose to impose fuel taxes. By that I mean, if the expenses of traveling to work or school by private vehicle cannot be justified by the convenience and comfort they get. Then surely they will opt for the alternative which is the free public transport[p2] .

In conclusion, unarguably, free public transportation system can alleviated alleviate the traffic issue in cities. But, from the city’s financial perspective, this is not the ultimate solution. Personally, I think that by setting a high parking fare and introducing some forms form of carbon dioxide emission tax will certainly improve the traffic condition in cities.

Comments:

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• Great use of transitional words and phrases.

• The reasons and examples you gave in the      essay show a logical progression of ideas that makes your essay coherent,      cohesive, and easy to understand.

• You need to work more on the parts of      speech, especially in knowing when to use an adjective. An adjective is      used whenever you are describing or modifying a noun or a pronoun.

That’s all for now. I am looking forward to reading the next essay from you. Keep writing! J

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Revision:

Nowadays, in the light of technological advancements, there are an increasing number of automobiles on the road. Thus traffic congestions are a chronic issue for many cities. Some assert that free public transport offered 24/7 is the solution. However, in my view, some supplemental measures also need to be implemented without using the city’s revenue.

First of all, in today’s world, auto vehicles have become incredibly affordable hence making it the most ideal transportation. Everybody enjoys the convenience it brings. Evidently, a great number of people commute to work by car and motorcycles. Likewise, teenagers who qualify for a driver’s license are also given the privilege of accessibility. This is best illustrated by the university or college car parks or even the street car parks. Admittedly, free public transportation will significantly motivate people to take advantage of this.

Additionally, municipal authorities are also recommended to make concerted efforts on this matter. For instance, making advertisements on the importance of the environment is essential. This will in turn raise people’s awareness of the environmental conservation, hopefully leading to less use of the automobiles. Another methodology would be to increase the parking fares and to impose fuel taxes. By that I mean, if the expenses of traveling to work or school by private vehicle cannot be justified by the convenience and comfort they get, then surely they will opt for the alternative which is the free public transport.

In conclusion, unarguably, free public transportation system can alleviate the traffic issue in cities. But, from the city’s financial perspective, this is not the ultimate solution. Personally, I think that by setting a high parking fare and introducing some form of carbon dioxide emission tax will certainly improve the traffic condition in cities.

 [p1]The word that this describes is a noun, therefore, you should be using an adjective.

 [p2]Since the thoughts in these two sentences are closely related, it would be better for them to be joined into one long sentence instead.