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Some countries achieve international success, building specialized sports facilities for top athletes to train instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Positive or negative?

Nowadays, a number of countries spare no efforts to enhance their international images including training talents to participate in international competitions. Although the practice may effectively build up their reputationsin the international arena, the negative sides cannot be overlooked.

Those countries, which set up special sports facilities for the best athletes to train,many have their reasons[E1] . By selecting and training physically excellent young childrenand winning championships in the international sport competitions, countries can build up their global reputationsin the world[E2] . Chinese athletesChina[E3] , for example, have always brought home the gold from has always remained on the top list ofthe Olympic Gamesin terms of gold medals, and this has which earned China international fame. Besides, by training top athletes and achieving international success, it is more likely to enhance social morale, confidence, and cohesion of one particular country.

However, it is not justified if sports facilities are only built for a particular group to use.It leads to disparity of sports resources between people. As an essential way for people to enhance physical fitness, sports should be excised[E4]  by everyone with sports facilities should be made available to each individual. Moreover, sports are beneficial for people to build up core values such as teamwork[E5] and mutual respect to mention a few. , etc.In the global village, sports also serve as a bridge to connect people of different races, ethnicities, and languages. Therefore, rather than paying more attention to competitive sports, general physical activities for the common citizens should also be promoted.

In conclusion, governments should grant extensive funding to in[E6] facilities, venues, and training programs to make it easier for more people to play sports, which in turn is essential to enhancing . Sports should be utilized to enhance[E7] national reputation, while but more importantly, addressing public need. to benefit the general public[E8] .

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You have quite a skillful use of the English language, although I had to change a few sentences to improve transition and make it better. Practice cohesion more. Great job nevertheless.

Nowadays, a number of countries spare no efforts to enhance their international images including training talents to participate in international competitions. Although the practice may effectively build up reputations in the international arena, the negative sides cannot be overlooked.

Those countries, which set up special sports facilities for the best athletes to train,many have their reasons[E9] . By selecting and training physically excellent young children and winning championships in the international sport competitions, countries can build up their global reputations. Chinese athletes, for example, have always brought home the gold from the Olympic Games, and this has earned China international fame. Besides, by training top athletes and achieving international success, it is more likely to enhance social morale, confidence, and cohesion of one particular country.

However, it is not justified if sports facilities are only built for a particular group to use. It leads to disparity of sports resources between people. As an essential way for people to enhance physical fitness, sports facilities should be made available to each individual. Moreover, sports are beneficial for people to build up core values such as teamwork and mutual respect to mention a few. In the global village, sports also serve as a bridge to connect people of different races, ethnicities, and languages. Therefore, rather than paying more attention to competitive sports, general physical activities for the common citizens should also be promoted.

In conclusion, governments should grant extensive funding to facilities, venues, and training programs to make it easier for more people to play sports, which in turn is essential to enhancing national reputation, while more importantly, addressing public need.

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REVISING FOR CLARITY,

CONCISENESS, AND READABILITY

ƒ Keep it simple.

ƒ Remove opening fillers.

ƒ Eliminate redundancies.

ƒ Reduce compound prepositions.

ƒ Purge empty words.

ƒ Kick the noun habit.

ƒ Develop parallelism (balanced construction).

KEEP IT SIMPLE.

Avoid indirect, pompous language.

ƒ Poor:

It would not be inadvisable for you to affix your signature at this point in time.

ƒ Improved:

You may sign now.

REMOVE OPENING FILLERS.

ƒ Wordy:

There are four new theories we must investigate.

ƒ Improved:

We must investigate four new theories.

ELIMINATE REDUNDANCIES.

REDUCE COMPOUND PREPOSITIONS.

PURGE EMPTY WORDS.

ƒ As for the area of athletic shoes, the degree of profits sagged.

ƒ This is to inform you that we have a toll-free service line.

ƒ Not all students who are registered will attend.

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KICK THE NOUN HABIT.

ƒ Wordy:

We must conduct an investigation of all evidence before we can give consideration to your theory.

ƒ Improved:

We must investigate all evidence before we can consider your theory.

DEVELOP PARALLELISM (BALANCED

CONSTRUCTION).

Not parallel: We can collect information, store it, and later it can be

updated.

Parallel: We can collect, store and update information.

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ƒ Names and numbers

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 [E1]This is an overused phrase and will not help your lexical resource. I suggest you change this.

 [E2]Unnecessary phrase

 [E3]Use the athletes; it would make better sense.

 [E4]This means removed.

 [E5]One word

 [E6]‘grant’ is paired with ‘to’ not ‘in’

 [E7]It’s awkward that the previous sentence ends with ‘sports’ and this starts with ‘sports’ too.

 [E8]Just say public.

 [E9]This is an overused phrase and will not help your lexical resource. I suggest you change this.